Retention is written

Long-form and Shorts · documentary scripts, and the retention architecture underneath them

Retention is written, not edited.

Most scripts don't fail at the writing. They fail at the structure underneath — and that's diagnosable before a frame is shot. I write long-form and Shorts for documentary and essay channels, and build the editorial system they come out of.

Who it's for

For channels where the video makes an argument — documentary, essay, explainer. Faceless or on-camera; the structure is the same either way. Whether you've plateaued and can't see why, or you're growing and can't hold the quality as you scale, the script is usually where it's decided.

Audience retention · typical long-form 0:00 → end

Every channel has a cliff. It is almost never where the creator thinks it is, it is written in before anything is shot, and it cannot be fixed in the edit.

If any of this is familiar

The video was fine. It still didn't work.

Four things I hear from almost every channel that gets in touch. If none of them land, I'm probably not who you need.

01

Some videos land, most don't, and you can't tell what separated them

You can see which ones worked. You cannot see why, which means you cannot do it again on purpose. Every upload is a fresh roll.

02

You hired a writer so you'd stop writing. You rewrote it anyway.

First draft came back wrong, so you fixed it. Then the second. By the fourth you stopped sending notes and just did it yourself again.

03

You can read the retention graph but not act on it

The drop is right there at forty seconds. What you don't know is whether that's the script, the edit or the thumbnail — so you change all three and learn nothing.

04

The channel doesn't sound like one channel

Each video is fine on its own. Together they read as a collection rather than a body of work, and nothing carries from one to the next.

If you write them yourself

You want the week back

Research, structure and draft take longer than everything else combined, and you still can't tell whether it's working until it's live. I take the writing; you keep the channel.

What you'd get →

If you've outsourced before

You want it to stick this time

The last writer produced one video at a time, so nothing carried and the voice drifted. The fix isn't a better writer, it's a system the writing comes out of.

How that works →

If you write for clients

You want capacity that holds a voice

Editing capacity you can add in a week. A writer who can hold a client's register across a whole slate takes months to find. White-labeled, your name on the work.

Agency terms →
The difference

Same research. Same runtime. Different video.

Three openings, each written twice. On the left, what the same brief normally produces. On the right, what I shipped.

The usual version

Hey everyone, welcome back to the channel. In today's video we're going to be talking about something that affects millions of investors around the world.

Studies show that people who check their portfolios frequently tend to make emotional decisions, and this can have a big impact on your long-term returns.

So if you've ever felt this way, make sure to stick around, because we're diving deep into the psychology of investing.

Seven words of greeting before the subject appears, then “millions of investors around the world,” which is everybody and therefore nobody. “Studies show” with no study. “A big impact” with no size. It asks the viewer to stay for a payoff it has not described, and in seventy-one words the only concrete noun is portfolios.

What I wrote

Refreshing your portfolio has never once made you money. You already know that. You will still check it four times before lunch.

You are not deciding anything. You are checking a wound.

In March 2020, at the peak of the panic, the app went down and stayed down for a full trading day. Locked out, unable to trade, people refreshed a screen that would not load, over and over, all day.

The first line is a flat contradiction about something the viewer did this morning, and the second closes the exit: you already know that. There is no lesson left to offer, so the only thing still worth watching for is why. The reframe then names the behavior honestly — this is not a video about panic selling. And the outage is not colour, it is the proof: the people refreshing that screen could not trade even if they had wanted to, which is the only way to show the compulsion existed separately from the decision.

71 words before71 words afterSame length. One gestures at a feeling; the other names the thing you did.

Approach

Two layers, in order

Most writers open a blank document and start typing. Each script becomes a fresh act of judgment, the voice drifts, and the channel never becomes one thing the algorithm can profile.

LAYER 01

The system — built once per channel

What your channel argues that its competitors don't, where topics sit on the advertiser-category boundary, the retention shape your format has to hold, and the packaging logic that decides whether a video gets clicked at all.

Niche-agnostic by design — built across behavioral psychology, personal finance and enterprise tech. The architecture doesn't change between niches; the research and vocabulary get rebuilt every time.

LAYER 02

The scripts — written to the system

Every script comes out of Layer 01, which is why video twelve is recognizably the same channel as video one. Consistency stops being something you police in review and becomes something the process produces.

Delivered as a full production package — script, b-roll brief, editor brief, packaging variants and upload metadata.

One video at a time
A channel-level system
Every script is a fresh act of judgment
Every script comes out of one architecture
The voice drifts by video four
Video twelve still sounds like the channel
Nobody can say which layer a problem lives in
The diagnosis names the layer
Nobody is accountable for the result
Stated accountability, in writing

This holds whichever alternative you're weighing it against — a cheap writer, a tool, or yourself at one in the morning. The problem was never who typed it. It's that nothing carried between one video and the next.

Process

The writing is the fourth step

A script is where this ends up. Most of the work that decides whether a video holds attention happens before a word is written.

01

Discover

What your channel argues that its competition doesn't, and which topics have demand nobody has served.

02

Validate

Who already covered it, what angle they all missed, and whether the idea can carry a video at all.

03

Design

The retention shape the format has to hold. Where the premise lands, where recognition happens.

04

Script

Written to that structure, in your channel's register, with the production brief attached.

05

Refine

Read the retention graph at day 28. What held, what didn't, what changes next time.

What ships

A production package, not a document

Most writers hand over prose and leave the interpretation to whoever builds the video.

The script

In your channel's register, sectioned so each part states what it's doing, formatted to paste straight into your voice tool. Sources for every factual claim.

The b-roll brief

Shot-by-shot direction described as behavior rather than category, with overlay specs, motion graphic build notes, and a reveal-marker table naming the moments the edit has to break pattern.

The editor brief

What the video argues, the assembly order, where pace shifts, and what must never be trimmed. Your editor starts without a call.

Three title + thumbnail concepts

YouTube tests up to three title and thumbnail pairs and promotes the winner automatically. Most writers deliver one, which means you're guessing. You get three distinct hypotheses about why someone clicks, one marked recommended.

Description and metadata

Description, chapters written as real search phrases, tags, sources and the pinned comment. Nothing left to write on upload day.

You don't have to take my word for any of that.

A real Blueprint, anonymised and partly redacted: the honest read, the four-gap analysis, and a full worked rewrite of one channel's opening, before and after.

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Accountability

What a script controls, and what it doesn't

Most engagements never define this, which is why they end in an argument about whose fault the numbers are.

Measure me on this

The script layer

  • Hook retention, 0–30 seconds
  • Average view duration
  • Shape of the retention curve
  • Comment depth and sentiment
  • Scrub-backs and rewatch points
Shared

I supply it, you execute it

  • CTR — I write titles and specify thumbnails; your designer builds them
  • Shares — I write the quotable moment; the edit decides if it travels
  • Subscriber conversion — script gives the reason, catalogue closes it
Out of scope

Not mine, and I won't pretend

  • Total views and impressions
  • Revenue, RPM and CPM
  • Thumbnail design execution
  • Voiceover, edit, footage, sound
Views are not a script metric. Reach is a distribution decision weighing dozens of signals, most of which sit in the third column. A script with excellent retention and 800 views has done its job — the reason it didn't travel is somewhere else, and I'd rather help you find it than take credit or blame for it.
Rates

Priced per deliverable, never per word

The Blueprint is charged once, and credited in full against your first four scripts. Every script after it is faster because the thinking is already done.

Taking on a limited number of new channels at a time. One writer, and the whole point is that the voice holds.

Retention Audit

$199 one video

  • Why the drop happens, not just where
  • What to change, line by line
  • Full packaging rework, title and thumbnail
  • The unclaimed angle in your niche
  • Three working days
Book an audit

Channel Blueprint

$750 one-time

  • Positioning and pillar structure
  • Routing boundaries
  • Retention specification
  • Voice guide with a worked rewrite
  • Ten topics ready to script
  • Credited in full against your first four scripts
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Production package

$650 per video

  • The script, in your channel's register
  • Shot-by-shot b-roll brief
  • Editor brief with the assembly order
  • Three title and thumbnail concepts
  • Description, chapters, tags, pinned comment
  • Long-form, 8 to 25 minutes
  • Script on its own, no briefs — $400
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Retainer

$1,350 / month

  • Essential — 2 long-form + 4 Shorts
  • Growth $2,450 — 4 + 8
  • Scale $4,500 — 8 + 16
  • Blueprint required from 4 long-form, credited in full
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Shorts

Written to the same system, on the same voice. Either derived from a long-form you've commissioned, or conceived standalone. Sold in packs because one Short in isolation rarely tells you anything.

$95single
$320pack of 4
$560pack of 8

What this costs elsewhere

Published US rates for the same three purchases, so you can see what you are and aren't paying for.

The purchaseA US agencyHere
Getting started — channel audit, positioning, content plan $2,500 – $10,000 $750
Per month, channel outsourced $4,000 – $12,000 $1,350 – $4,500
One long-form script $400 – $1,200 $650

Two of those are not the same purchase, and I'd rather say so than let the table imply otherwise. An agency retainer buys production, editing, thumbnails, ad management and an account manager between you and whoever actually writes. The writing is one line item inside it. If you already have an editor, most of that spend is on a layer you don't need.

The third row is the honest like-for-like, and note that it is not the cheap option — it sits mid-band for experienced US writers. What you're not paying for is the agency around them.

A long-form video costs you a week — research, writing, recording, editing, packaging. The script is the part that decides whether that week was worth spending.

Rates scale with runtime, research depth and turnaround. Fifty percent upfront, two revision rounds included.

Run a studio or agency?

Writing capacity, white-labeled

Your editing capacity is probably covered and your writing capacity probably isn't. That's the part I take — briefed once per client channel, holding one voice across the whole slate, your name on the work and mine nowhere near it.

Scripts arrive with shot direction and an assembly order attached, so your editors cut instead of interpreting prose. Non-solicitation as standard.

Talk about capacity
Turnaround
4 working days
Capacity
By arrangement
Credit
White-label
From
$375 / script
Questions

Before you email

What niches do you work in?

Deepest in personal finance, enterprise technology and AI, behavioral psychology, health research and business — those are the niches I've built in. The method is structural though, so it transfers to economics and industry, consumer culture, science and engineering. Anything where the video makes an argument.

What I don't write: true crime, partisan politics or current-affairs commentary, medical or health advice, and anything reaction, vlog, gameplay or personality-led. The first three sit inside YouTube's limited-monetization categories or carry legal exposure, which makes them a bad trade for you regardless of how well they're written. On health I report what the research found — I never write guidance.

Will this get me more views?

No, and be careful with anyone who promises it. Views depend on your thumbnail, your edit, your upload timing and your channel's existing profile. What a script moves is how long people stay once they've clicked — and how many of them get far enough to be worth anything to you.

Do you need access to my analytics?

It's better with them. A screenshot of one video's retention graph roughly doubles what I can tell you. But the audit works from the public video alone, so it's optional, and I won't chase you for it.

How long does it take?

Long-form scripts, four working days. Shorts, two. The audit comes back in three. Blueprints take about a week — most of that is watching your catalogue and your competitors properly, which isn't a step worth rushing.

What if the first script isn't right?

Two revision rounds are included, scoped as corrections within the agreed angle. If the angle itself changes, that's a new script. Most of the risk is handled earlier than that though — the free teardown and the audit both exist so you can judge how I think before you commit to anything.

What do you need from me to start?

For an audit, three things: your channel link, one video you thought should have done better, and — optionally — a screenshot of that video's retention graph. That's it.

For scripts, more: analytics access or screenshots, the three videos you're proudest of and the three that disappointed you, who your competition is, what's off-limits, and who else has to approve a script before it's filmed. I ask for all of it once, in one document, rather than dripping questions at you for a week.

I don't have content pillars or a strategy. Can you still write?

Yes — working that out is the job, not a prerequisite for it. Most channels that come to me have no defined structure, which is usually part of why the uploads don't read as one channel.

For one to three long-form scripts it doesn't much matter. From the fourth it does, so the Blueprint comes first, and the $750 is credited in full against those first four scripts. Eight scripts without a defined structure is eight separate acts of judgment, and by the fifth I'd be guessing at decisions I made in the second. That's the exact problem I'd have just finished diagnosing for you.

Do you write Shorts, or only long-form?

Both. Long-form is where most of the work sits, because that's where structure has the furthest to fall — but Shorts are written to the same system and the same voice, either pulled out of a long-form you've commissioned or conceived standalone.

They're sold in packs of four or eight. One Short on its own rarely tells you anything: the format is volatile enough that a single result is noise, and you need a run before the pattern means something.

What happens to my scripts and analytics?

They stay private. I don't publish client work, name clients without written permission, or reuse your positioning for anyone else — including channels in your subject area. Anything I publish publicly is anonymised past recognition, or it isn't published.

Research uses official, documented interfaces only. Nothing is collected by working around a login or an access control, and I delete material you've sent whenever you ask.

Do you work with agencies and studios?

Yes, white-labeled, with non-solicitation as standard. Volume rates from $375 a script, on a committed monthly minimum. Details here.

Send one video. Get a real teardown.

One page back within 48 hours: where retention breaks, which layer it lives in, and what your packaging is currently signalling. It tells you what is wrong. What to do about it is the audit. No call, no obligation — if it's useful on its own, keep it and we never have to speak.